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The calm day was invigorating and the aspecting view hypnotised me. The natural charm of this tremendous panorama struck me with awe. I had been fishing for fish to eat for dinner. The smell of rain filled the air; it had rained a couple of days ago. I looked up and saw the mountain, like an Emperor sitting in his chair. There were people playing on the mountain, and I thought what a beautiful day! I stirred my oar quietly as possible for I did not want to disturb the peacefulness I stirred my oar like a cricket on a silent light. The smell of Grandma’s cookies sauntered out of the house and into my nose like a bakery with good treats. Then I viewed I realized that all the riches in the world were right in my yard. All of the trees swayed their branches like they were dancing. I heard frogs croaking and bees buzzing. Their honey dripped like a flaxen amber, mesmerizing any one who saw it. I had caught some fish. I took them inside our house and sat beneath a tree. The autumn leaves poured onto me like icing on a cake. Gusts of wind blew on my skin. The wind blew like someone running. The water turned into waves before my eyes. Suddenly everything turned into a sunny beach. People were swimming and laughing  without  a care in the world. Since it was only an illusion, I decided to head to the waterfall tomorrow. As the sun set, the miraculous crimson red color blew me away. The clouds reflected light from the sun like a ball bouncing around. I took one last look at the gleaming sun and went inside to eat on Thanksgiving.The calm day was invigorating and the aspecting view hypnotised me. The natural charm of this tremendous panorama struck me with awe. I had been fishing for fish to eat for dinner. The smell of rain filled the air; it had rained a couple of days ago. I looked up and saw the mountain, like an Emperor sitting in his chair. There were people playing on the mountain, and I thought what a beautiful day! I stirred my oar quietly as possible for I did not want to disturb the peacefulness I stirred my oar like a cricket on a silent light. The smell of Grandma’s cookies sauntered out of the house and into my nose like a bakery with good treats. Then I viewed I realized that all the riches in the world were right in my yard. All of the trees swayed their branches like they were dancing. I heard frogs croaking and bees buzzing. Their honey dripped like a flaxen amber, mesmerizing any one who saw it. I had caught some fish. I took them inside our house and sat beneath a tree. The autumn leaves poured onto me like icing on a cake. Gusts of wind blew on my skin. The wind blew like someone running. The water turned into waves before my eyes. Suddenly everything turned into a sunny beach. People were swimming and laughing  without  a care in the world. Since it was only an illusion, I decided to head to the waterfall tomorrow. As the sun set, the miraculous crimson red color blew me away. The clouds reflected light from the sun like a ball bouncing around. I took one last look at the gleaming sun and went inside to eat on Thanksgiving.



                                                               Here is the picture I used that inspired me:                             



 



               
                                                                                                                                                                                                                             







First I made a plan, made a rough draft, and then edited it with a partner.

It took a long time but finally, I turned everything in.



Here is my rough draft.






The calm day still was invigorating- in beauty and wonder. The natural charm of this tremendous panorama struck me with awe. I had been fishing for fish to eat for dinner. The smell of rain filled the air; as it had rained a couple of days ago. I looked up and saw the mountain, like an Emperor sitting in his chair. There were people playing on the mountain, and I thought what a beautiful day! I stirred my oar quietly as possible for I did not want to disturb the peacefulness. I realized that all the riches in the world were right in my yard. All the trees swayed their branches like they were dancing. I heard frogs croaking and bees buzzing their honey dripped like a flaxen amber, mesmerizing any one who saw it. I had caught some fish. I took them inside our house and sat beneath a tree. The autumn leaves poured onto me like sauce on a cake. Gusts of wind blew on my skin. The wind blew like someone running. The water turned into waves before my eyes. Suddenly everything turned into a sunny beach. People were swimming and laughing  without  a care in the world. Since it was only an illusion, I decided to head to the waterfall tomorrow. As the sun set, the miraculous crimson red color blew me away. Then the family called for me to bringthe fish inside to eat.



It was some work but I finally turned it in.